Monday, September 12, 2011

Campaigner Challenge #1: Flash Fiction

I made myself a commitment that I was going to participate in the Campaign. So, though belated, here's my contribution to the first challenge. The task was to write a flash fiction scene in 200 words or fewer, beginning with the phrase "The door swung open". Mine is exactly two hundred words ;)

The door swung open. My breath caught in my chest. There, stacked in orderly rows, was enough ammunition and ordnance to arm a mobile platoon, or even a full company.
“Looks like we hit the mark this time,” I said over my shoulder. Greer stepped to my shoulder and peered in at the cache of weapons.

“Or pretty close to it,” he said. “We’re going to have to remove all of this before anyone else stumbles onto it.”

“I agree. Why don’t you call dispatch and get an ordnance removal squad out here. I’ll call the boss and let her know what we’ve found. She’ll be interested to know how much these thugs have managed to smuggle all this into the city—not to mention how they got into a dump like this without being noticed.”

I turned to go. The two guards at the door didn’t move out of the way. I’d barely noticed their grim expressions before I felt something hard and cool pressed into the small of my back.

“They didn’t,” Greer said quietly. “They were just noticed by the right people. Now, hand over your sidearm, and you’ll get through this alive."

The door swung closed.
Disclaimer: I wrote this on the fly, with no planning or editing, so you'll have to forgive me if it's a little rough or cliche.

Anyway, check back tomorrow for the launch of my first ever contest!


  1. Ooh, that wasn't an ending I expected, well done!

  2. Oh no...e tu, brute? Very nice. Really good job with that twist at the end.

  3. I didn't expect that ending! Great flash fiction.

    It actually reminds me a bit of my WIP--perhaps it's a case of great minds think alike? :)

  4. Great job, Reece! Totally unexpected ending!

  5. Nice twist ending, I liked it :)

  6. For having written this on the fly, I wouldn't have known that if you hadn't said so. What an awesome story. I hope the dude gets himself out of that conundrum!

    Great job, Reece! :)

  7. Great piece! Love the betrayal at the end. I want to know what happens next.

  8. Oh, betrayal. Nicely done. I didn't see it coming. :)

  9. That was a nice little piece, I liked the twist. But where is your entry for the Second Challenge? ;)
    I'm number 180 on that linky list.

    By the way, we are in the same sci-fi campaigner-group.